Sorry for the lengthy writing. I hesitated on sharing this one for a handful of reasons, including my lack of ability to spell and my obvious need for some editing, but I chose to share it because my kids begged me to share something I had written for this class and when I shared this their response was very exciting. Read it with the lens of a six year old and I am sure you will be impressed ( ;
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I would have thought the same thing as the first doctor. I'll see it in the poop! Glad you had it taken out though! How scary it would have been if you'd been unable to breathe? Why were you doing the magic trick? Was it to keep from having to go to bed? Why did your dad think you needed to go to the ER? (seems he was right though!)
ReplyDeleteYou’re writing was so fun to read. I was hooked from the beginning and found myself on the edge of my seat cringing as I guessed what could be on the next page. I’m glad it turned out alright! You opened your piece discussing the familiar bedtime pleadings of a young child and I instantly connected, remember times I did the same. I thought your conclusion with your dad losing your treasured token was a great ending as well. This could easily be a piece that could include some fun pictures as well!
ReplyDeleteSorry for the typo at the beginning of my comment. I meant to say: Your writing was so fun to read.
DeleteJennifer, I am so glad you shared your story with us. I thought you did a excellent job describing a very scary ordeal. It is also important that we show our students that teachers make mistakes. It lets the students know that teachers make mistakes too and that is okay. I had a similar ordeal to yours. I was given a nickel when I was around 2 and I was messing around. My grandpa told me to put the money up or he would take it back. Well I swallowed it so he couldn't. We did the trip to the emergency room were I had surgery and during the surgery they lost power. Long story short my dad carried the nickel in his wallet until he lost it. Thanks for that connection in helping me remember a story of my past.
ReplyDeleteLove it!!! I think that when we write about things that happen in our childhood, we have to put our mindset back to where it was when it happened, and then our writing sounds younger. I'm sure that your students enjoyed it because they could totally relate to what happened! Thank you for sharing!
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